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Kmmjones' face in Profile

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Unlike my brothers profile portrait, this is accurate, no matter what Kmmjones says :P.

This was done on a small square canvas with graphite, loads of fun for the family, sitting there, doing nothing while you have the most frustrating time of your life drawing their bloody Face!
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

1) Your use of canvas makes for an really cool texture on the piece. As in the previous critique, I would also agree that a varied line weight and value would increase impact. I also think the issue is exactly what you had complained about in your notes: it's hard to draw on canvas, and even more so if you use a traditional canvas frame, which is faintly visible in this photo. increasing pressure on the graphite doesn't work so well as with a paper on a pad. In the future, if drawing on canvas, I would put the canvas on a solid block or board so you have the luxury of varying the pressure on your pencil/graphite stick.

2) Beautiful job on the features of the face.

3) I think this is partially related to the technical challenges mentioned in 1, but the hair looks flat and flattens everything else. A stronger change in value would have made a difference here. Also, it looks like you were drawing each hair individually, which tend to flatten things as well. There are usually strong regions of value in hair. It might be a good idea to mark those out first and give them values. Once set, Go back and on top of that add a few darker and lighter strands, and the areas where the hair ends.

4)Last critique is on presentation: I tried to understand your comment that this was for a ID, and thus you didn't want to crop. Could you clarify that? If I understand what you were after, It might be a good idea to use a different, shallower camera angle for the shot than straight on, so you see more of the canvas frame, and the shadow/highlight on the frame would more effectively say "this is on canvas." Otherwise, this is in desperate need of cropping, the background kills the work.